Talk:TMBG Concert - 5 Mar 2010

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:Perhaps something like "Contrary to Homestar's claim..." could start the sentence. {{User:Heimstern Läufer/sig}} 10:14, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
:Perhaps something like "Contrary to Homestar's claim..." could start the sentence. {{User:Heimstern Läufer/sig}} 10:14, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
::I think that's overkill. Obviously Homestar's claim is false, and no one would take it seriously, so we don't really need to say as much. The fact as is currently written presumes that the viewer has already watched the video, and it needs the "actually" because it's contradicting something already said. Without the "actually", it feels like we're spouting off some trivia for no real reason, but with the "contrary to" it would feel like we're explaining the joke. — [[User:It's dot com|It's dot com]] 17:24, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
::I think that's overkill. Obviously Homestar's claim is false, and no one would take it seriously, so we don't really need to say as much. The fact as is currently written presumes that the viewer has already watched the video, and it needs the "actually" because it's contradicting something already said. Without the "actually", it feels like we're spouting off some trivia for no real reason, but with the "contrary to" it would feel like we're explaining the joke. — [[User:It's dot com|It's dot com]] 17:24, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
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:::I see your point, Dot com, but I think that each article should make sense on its own. If we include "actually" then we make the (more or less) arbitrary assumption that the reader will read the first two paragraphs, then watch the video, and then read the fun facts. Currently "actually" doesn't refer to anything in the article. I don't think that's wrong or hard to understand, just not very good style ;-){{User:Loafing/sig}} 06:47, 10 March 2010 (UTC)

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Currently, the article says '"With a Little Help from My Friends" was actually written by..'. I believe that we should either not use the word "actually" or we should mention that Homestar claims to have written the song. Loafing 09:46, 9 March 2010 (UTC)

Perhaps something like "Contrary to Homestar's claim..." could start the sentence. Heimstern Läufer 10:14, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
I think that's overkill. Obviously Homestar's claim is false, and no one would take it seriously, so we don't really need to say as much. The fact as is currently written presumes that the viewer has already watched the video, and it needs the "actually" because it's contradicting something already said. Without the "actually", it feels like we're spouting off some trivia for no real reason, but with the "contrary to" it would feel like we're explaining the joke. — It's dot com 17:24, 9 March 2010 (UTC)
I see your point, Dot com, but I think that each article should make sense on its own. If we include "actually" then we make the (more or less) arbitrary assumption that the reader will read the first two paragraphs, then watch the video, and then read the fun facts. Currently "actually" doesn't refer to anything in the article. I don't think that's wrong or hard to understand, just not very good style ;-) Loafing 06:47, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
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